I used quotes from the story that support my arguments. I annotated each quote’s explanation concerning the theme.

My final draft reflects my efforts to polish my work and is better than the rough draft, which demonstrates that I revised my work thoroughly. I can improve clarity by breaking up some of my long sentences.

I could have been more simple with my writing. My formal writing does not suit the context of the theme I am addressing.

I can improve my formal writing by avoiding repetitiveness. I can work on my formal writing by varying my vocabulary.